I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 7 and in 2021 I will be a year 8. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Thursday, 17 September 2020
Art
Art
One dark day in the open blue there was a girl that come out of white smoke/the fog. She was driving her gray car on a big brown bridge but she saw the pink blossom trees in the night stars she wanted to take a picture under it as soon as she was going to stop her car on the green grass she was all out of fuel so she stopped at the middle of the bridge were there were cars coming. She didn't know what to do she thought of a idea but she thought it was weird but she did it anyway she got out of her car and pushed it on top of the grass were the bushes were pushing it back so she had to do the side of the bridge the people stopped and saw she was out of fuel so they desired to help her. After that someone handed her a ride and bloped the Chain onto her car. she even gotten to take a picture under the tree. :D
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Hello its me lAcie.
ReplyDeletei like your story great job. I enjoyed reading it maybe next time you could add a bit more.
Hi Casey
ReplyDeleteI love you your story and how you add the face in the end of the story. Next time could you make the story the same size as the introduction. Overall it was amazing
- Carla
don't worry I made it the same size now! hope this is what you meant
DeleteKia ora Casey
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your piece of narrative writing. Maybe next time you could include the photo of your art work so we knew what the story was about. You made a really beautiful piece of art!
- Miss Birtch
thank you miss birtch If i could only take it off your wall i could take a photo of it hope you read this!
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